sounds good!
just wanted to take the opportunity to give some praise and some critique over last weeks update.
First the critique. About Vitamin C.
To be honest the first part of the story contains some of the best character-work you've yet done in my opinion. The two main characters Brett & Rebecca really seem real enough in the first part. You've given them small quirks and just pretty well-rounded character-feats. This works well because it makes it harder to predict what will happen to them, cause they're not stereotypical.
However, the transformation itself is a bit of a letdown in this regard. Though I liked the plot in that it chose another POV than usual (ie. usually we get to see the girl turned into a s
lut) the transformation itself seemed to skip over a lot of the nice characteristics of the two that started the story. the epilogue was good but it still left me wanting to see/read more about the changes in both the characters. you know what I mean?
anyway, the story does show a progression in storytelling and I do think you're getting better at creating interesting characters to play with, just don't forget to let us enjoy the show
Now for some more positive feedback concercing Battle of the Bimb
o's part 7.
Simply put, I loved the transformation!! It was like a breath of fresh air! The way Cynthia changed her daughter and herself into s
luts by accident was a great, great idea. I've been thinking about why this transformation works so much better for me than all the previous ones in the story and it probably has a lot to do with unexpectency. You DON'T expect Cynthia to willingly turn her daughter into a s
lut, but the moment she starts to experiment, you KNOW something in that line will happen, which makes reading that part almost suspenceful, and at least incredibly HOT. Things happening unexpectedly for us and (very important) for the characters themselves seems like a great engine to drive along a story.
It just started with a joke, but soon it's out of control and the girls don't really know what's happening, has happened or will happen. That feeling, of the characters being in the grey, oblivious to what changes they put in motion, that's the essence of a good story in the genre in my mind. and well, you succeeded magnificently this time.
Maby you could try a whole short-story or something like that centered around this device.
anyway, to wrap it up, you're doing great work. Not everything works for me, but when you hit it right, it's more than worth the price of admission!
ps.how are requested stories coming along? do you have a sort of time-indication for how long it will take for your request to come through? like, are you now busy writing the stories that were requested 2 months ago, or doesn't it work that way? just curious
WR