Post by JMichaelsoffline on May 22, 2005 15:12:26 GMT -5
Grey,
First off good start to the Mental Pills/Stone crossover. You just had to go and revisit my favorite pill and transformation victim at the beginning (hope we read about her second transformation as well)! I wonder how Tommy can ever compete with a wish granting rock, but I'm sure if anyone can pull it off its you.
Wrong Girl - These short ones are almost too short, it feels like they need another paragraph or two really describing the changes each girl is going through in order to be complete and not feel like you rushed the story (High Stakes included). Overall it was an interesting vignette.
High Stakes - This one I'd like to see made into a longer story, perhaps morph the story into something involving a magical/cursed deck of cards and an unsuspecting Sorority house that one night receives the cards from a rival frat house. Forcing them to play for their 'dignity', or even use the 'game' angle and instead of poker some cursed board game would be nice to see. Again, good story, just wish it had a bit more discription surrounding the girl's change.
Good update, I'll read Mandi later and post my thoughts when I'm done.
First off good start to the Mental Pills/Stone crossover. You just had to go and revisit my favorite pill and transformation victim at the beginning (hope we read about her second transformation as well)! I wonder how Tommy can ever compete with a wish granting rock, but I'm sure if anyone can pull it off its you.
Wrong Girl - These short ones are almost too short, it feels like they need another paragraph or two really describing the changes each girl is going through in order to be complete and not feel like you rushed the story (High Stakes included). Overall it was an interesting vignette.
High Stakes - This one I'd like to see made into a longer story, perhaps morph the story into something involving a magical/cursed deck of cards and an unsuspecting Sorority house that one night receives the cards from a rival frat house. Forcing them to play for their 'dignity', or even use the 'game' angle and instead of poker some cursed board game would be nice to see. Again, good story, just wish it had a bit more discription surrounding the girl's change.
Good update, I'll read Mandi later and post my thoughts when I'm done.