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Post by Polecat on Apr 21, 2005 20:01:55 GMT -5
Very nice MrGrey and nikki! Very enjoyable...particularly the way the girls knew what was going to happen but couldn't do anything about it. A bit like Mental Pills in which the girls are awaiting the changes...top stuff.
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Post by Mandi on Apr 21, 2005 20:43:18 GMT -5
I loved this one too! Barefoot and Pregnant wasnt quite my thing, but this one was really great! Can't wait for the next one!
Mandi
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Post by alexey101 on Apr 22, 2005 5:49:49 GMT -5
Yes I loved it too. A specially the horror of the girls who know what is going to happened to them and can't do nothing about it. I think it puts some additional spice into the story. When the victim doesn't realise what's happeneing as in Amateur Night story this is less fun than when the victim is aware of the changes and tries to figt them off. On the other hand I think it can be funny if the changes happens unaware to the victim and she continues with her regular life as if nothing happened, but with the new changes. I mean, for example, in case of bisness women. Some bibomization : blonde hair, fake boobs, revealing clouses etc. But she continue to go to her work without realsation that something changed as always. Or if in "Amateur Night" Lily Nichols after her performance on the stage would return back and continue discuss a deal as if nothing happened but with her new look I think it defenetly would be a great fun. I mean seeing the stripper sitting and disscussing busness trying to look and sound professional, looking into business papers over her 32FF fake tits ..... What you guys think about it ? Anyway don't understand me wrong, I enjoyed all stories and waiting for more.
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Post by whiterabbit on Apr 22, 2005 9:46:42 GMT -5
it's an interesting dillemma you pointed out. The thin line between being aware of the changes and not being aware. In the case that the person, and often the rest of her surroundings, are aware of the changes it's pretty easy to make things plausible and logical, because the change is percieved as one by everyone.
However, when you incorporate elements of unawareness things start to get more complicated. Because how much of reality do you want to change. If you go too far, there is a good chance that the effect of the story dissapears. That was a bit of the problem with Amateur night, in that reality changed so much, the feeling of change was almost gone, it begins to feel more like a shift in perspective than a real change.
However, this is not to say that unawareness is bad perse. Frankly, it's my preferred method of transformation. (struggle and nonconsensus don't appeal to me that much, though this is not an absolute).
But you have to tread a thin line, how much change do you want? Amateur night was best in the beginning of the story. the first changes often are the best, and easiest. Just small changes in appearance, attitude, outfit, mentality etc. IT was good because it didn't change too much. Ariana's attitude ad. was also good all-around because the changes were subtle enough and not all-encompassing.
Another example is Maximize your pleasure, which was posted on the bimbovery *friendly* personz story site. In it a husband and wife are slowly transformed during lovemaking into more vain, s.luttly, arrogant people. The whole story was great in my opinion, but 1 thing disrupted the enjoyment. *SPOILERS* In the end, the wife is changed into a sleeper and the marriage that existed between the two dissapeared from existence. That was a wrong path to go I thought. Because it changed reality too much, made the two main characters só completely different, you couldn't connect them with their original versions. IF the story ended where they were both turned into s.lutty, vain, arrogant, etc. people, but still retained their marriage, that would have been better I believe. Would make for a better balance...
So to conclude. It certainly is worth the trouble to write about reality changes in which unawareness plays a part, but you have to be careful not to break away every connection with the starting-situation.
anyone agree or disagree...feel free to post!
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